Oct 14, 2017, 12:07 PM
it's really good and a nice start for a story, i would just try to use less 'she' or 'her' as it start to become repetitive quick, but beside that it's nice and easy too read through.
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A New Project - by Kris - Oct 14, 2017, 11:26 AM
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